After getting feedback from paul he pointed out several mistakes within my story. to fix these problems im going to go back and alter the characters personality to make it easier for the audiance to relate to them.
Because with the hero i made her slightly arrogant which led to her downfall and her reason for trying to redeem herself. paul pointed out that the audiance wouldnt feel sympathy for a arrogant character when they made a mistake, they would feel like they got what they deserved even if they redeemed themselves later.
Because of this i have changed the motivation for the hero as trying to prove herself to her father who shes constantly trying to live up to. This causes her to be more rash when making choices and leads to her making mistakes rather then the arrogance.
As for the seriel killer, not to much of her past is going to come out in the skit ive chosen so leaving her history brief is best for the time being, as if would take my attention away from other areas of work.
The story itself was to complicated although i never intended to animate the whole lot, I have since written out a small skit that i will storyboard and get feedback from my tutors.
so my aims for the next week or so is to get the characters drawn up and get a first draft of the storyboard to show everyone. After that it wil be a case of refining it down more and then getting the timings done for the animatic.
Tuesday, 29 June 2010
Tuesday, 8 June 2010
family trees of hero and villian
I had to post the last post as picture images as blogger wouldnt let me copy and paste my written work straight into it, you work down from the top post to the bottom. this is what ive been working on over the last few months.
here are the villians and heros family trees. this helped me work out certain sections of the story.
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